Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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success
in people mind
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a long time . Few people believe that continue
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truggle and focused thinking about goal bring
success
while some think that wealth and lifestyle are
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ssential part of
success
.
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work
and determination are more important
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other things. Hard
work
and focus is key to
success
. It
is often find
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that a person who is willing to pay his 100% attention toward
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oal and continues
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ork on his goal always achieve
success
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nd.Determination and
work
hard always pay off .
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we have learnt from
teen age
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in schools if you give your full attention towards your study
then
you will get
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ood score in exam
also
a student who do top in class his key to
success
is always continue hours of focused study and determination to achieve top rank in class . So hard
work
and constant focus become
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ajor factor of
success
. Wealth and personality
shows
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the
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brighter part of
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erson. If someone has wealth he
donot
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do not
don't
need to do much hard
work
and it
become
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easy for them to invest money in
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ifferent sector without any hesitation and worry.
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good
apperance
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appearance
seem
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in
this
world as
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ign of
success
.
Mostly
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people see people with luxury car and branded suit
successfull
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successful
successfully
and they earn more respect . In conclusion , wealth and luxury lifestyle play
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ital part in
success
but hard
work
and continue determination toward
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oal helps to achieve happiness because that struggle comes back to you every time and pays your every single
second
of
hardwork
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hard work
.
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