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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
Cities across the globe have advanced in infrastructure, which has lead to
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ncrease in
traffic
congestion
. In
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 essay, I will discuss the causes and solutions for the same. In the
last
 decade, major metropolitan cities in my country have expanded, acquiring and gathering more land under
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 jurisdiction. The reason for the above is the increase in population. It is human nature to keep migrating to different cities
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 better employment opportunities. Due to the lack of companies situated in smaller towns, people who reside in these towns are bound to move to larger cities.
This
 is the beginning of over-population in larger cities, that leads to
traffic
congestion
. The taxes on purchasing a 2/4 wheeler in India is much lesser as compared to other countries, which results in one's desire to own a vehicle.
This
 is the
second
 cause for
traffic
congestion
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Although
 people grumble about the
traffic
 and enormous hours spent on the road travelling to and fro on a daily basis, yet they prefer travelling via their own vehicle. In order to solve
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this
 problem, the Government is trying to provide various means of public transport across the city,
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but the problem lies in the fact that the services are not seamless. In recent years, many start-ups have risen to enable people to hail shared rides to reduce the
congestion
, but yet it has only increased the menace. In my opinion, private companies who are solving for
traffic
congestion
 should work together with the Government, to solve for
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 connectivity problems that currently public transport is not able to solve for.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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