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Some people with good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

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,Traveling
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abroad
 to find a job is a common idea,
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 is taken by many people around with a high
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 and experience to many reasons ,
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 essay will discuss the causes , and provide the disadvantages related to that. Recently many people decide to move
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abroad
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 to find good job chance , or to find new suitable life ,
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 , a numerous number of persons
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 who have
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high learning , decide in a stage of their life to find a new
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business
 with the best salary and many other features , so when a chance
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abroad
 , ones will accept it
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 .Another main reason is to search for a
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convenient
 duty , wich consistent with today life demands ,
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research
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 have substantiated that 90%of people travel abroad to get a considerable role.
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 think moving abroad have many drawbacks , and it may lead to many problems , one of the main problems may
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 of money due to high
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accommodation
 costs, living out of the city had been always more expensive , many surveys had done to cover
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 case ,and the result proved that foreigners
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suffered
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 of high tenancy overseas.
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 its is important to give back to the country what it offered to you from education , health assistance , so rather than giving the country ones
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experience
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 to other to conclude , moving abroad opens the prospects for many if it is consistent with
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 essay discussed why it is common to travel abroad to work , and the
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problem
problems
 caused by that .
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