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Some believed that spending time with family and friends is the best while others believe that time should rather be spent on career improvement. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#time #friends #career #improvement
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Time
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 is the most important thing for everyone in their
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 but it depends on how they use. Some people think that spending
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 with family and friends more important than focus to make a better
career
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. I am explaining
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 the views with my opinion. To begins with, family and friends
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 are equally important for
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, from the birth of the child till the mature age of human, parents always nurture them and friends always help and support in the social world.
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, people usually go outside like visit some specific place or roaming somewhere
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 he always chooses family or friends because
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ndividual can make good memories with them and make his
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 the best.
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, where spending
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 a with family and friends, there
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 important to improve or focus on the
career
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 because of
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, a person can fulfil his all dreams or he can do his dream job or make
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good money and live a luxury
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 but all of
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 can possible if a person spent
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 on his studies or his work to make a better future for himself According to my opinion, a person should manage a
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 with
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 families and friends and in his
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 because
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 are equally important. Without family or friends a human cannot live his
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 or without his
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 cannot fulfil his dreams or face the society. In the nutshell, an individual should make a proper balance between family or friends and
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areer. He should give his
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 for
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 because parents or friends always give strength and
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 change a fortune.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bonding
  • nurturing
  • emotional support
  • quality time
  • connectedness
  • memorable experiences
  • networking
  • skill development
  • career progression
  • financial security
  • contribution
  • fulfillment
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