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The most effective way to solve traffic problems in the cities is to encourage people from suburbs or the countryside to live in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#traffic #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
The
first
 pie
chart
 illustrates amounts of
energy
 used for various purposes by Australian households, while the
second
 pie
chart
give
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informations
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information
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 about the amounts of greenhouse gas emission which they caused. According to the
first
chart
, the largest proportion of
energy
 is utilized for heating, which is exactly 12% more than the percentage of
energy
 used for water heating.
Additionaly
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Additionally
Additional
, refrigeration, lighting and cooling consumed 7%, 4% and 2% of the
energy
 generated, respectively.
Hence
, the small
minitory
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monitor
monitory
minatory
 of
that is
 contributed to cooling. It is apparent the greenhouse gas
emmision
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emission
emissions
is result
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is resulted
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 from
energy
 uses. As can be seen from the
second
 pie
chart
,
p
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the
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ercentages of
green houses
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greenhouses
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 emitted by all purposes, except heating, are almost doubled than
p
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the
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ercentages of
energy
 consumed.
Accordingly
, the
heighest
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highest
 amount of
green house
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greenhouse
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 gas emitted by water heating, and the smallest by cooling. Even though
,
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 heating consumed almost half of the total
energy
 generated, it just produced almost 15% of the emissions.
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