Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is currently a contentious argument whether electronic devices are should be considered as a benefit to youth or not. In
this
essay, I will examine both sides and
then
explain why I believe how these equipment are good for children's' development. Admittedly, electronic devices can be detrimental. The main reason for
that is
because it can lead children to isolation. It is known that electronic devices can turn children addicted to it since because it provides a delightful satisfaction.
Therefore
, if parents do not nourish their children and discipline them they will not be able to tighten relationships with real friends which can be harmful in the future.
For example
, children tend to leave school and run home in order to enjoy playing at home
instead
of play with real colleagues at school and
this
behaviour can be extended to adult life.
Although
the reason aforementioned, electronic devices can far bring benefits to children. Mainly, these equipment help youngers in develop their focus. Mainly, when they are coping with electronics
such
as videos, games and suchlike they already have disconnected from the world and get concentration only to these devices while relaxing at the same time.
For instance
, when people are watching movies or spending some time in front of a computer they are relaxing due to the fact that they are able to forget about life problems when paying attention these activities;
thus
, they are increasing their focus. In conclusion, despite the fact that electronics can be harmful by turning children more isolated, I believe that the benefits that come up
such
as raising focus at the same time that they are relaxing for a couple of hours.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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