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Some people say that government should decide what subjects a student can study, while other believe the students should decide what they want to study.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #subjects #student #study #students
There are certain section people who believe that
subject
 studied by a
student
 should be decided by the government.Whereas, the other section of people trust that students must have
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reedom to make a choice of the
subject
 they would like to study
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. There has been a rise in unemployment since
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ast few decades.
Also
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it has been observed that demand for
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orkforce is high in comparison to the supply in certain sectors and vice versa.
For example
,It is observed a shortage of doctors and scientists in our country.
On the contrary
, there are many unemployed MBA degree holders. If the government selects the career path for each
student
,
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this
 imbalance of the workforce would be corrected. In
this
 way
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the class of 50
student
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 will eventually be divided into
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qual number of doctors, teachers,lawyers etc.
Instead
 of only having
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BA and Engineers. On the flip side, if a
student
 is not passionate
towards
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 the
subject
 assigned, there are higher chances for failure.A
student
 may
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loose
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 focus and interest in studies which
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 forced upon.
This
 will eventually lead to
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igher number of dropouts and the country will have
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ow ratio of professionals compared to other countries.
For instance
, A
student
 pressurized to study medicine will ultimately become a frustrated doctor and will risk other people's lives. Whereas liberty to study as per individual interest will motivate the
student
 to achieve excellence in the career path. Pupil if studying the choice of
subject
 will
definately
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definitely
 learn and work with full dedication and determination. In my
opnion
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opinion
, Education plays an important role in shaping a person’s life. career choice should not be enforced on any
student
 as it is a fundamental right of a
student
 to choose the
subject
 and pursue the line of work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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