Some people say that government should decide what subjects a student can study, while other believe the students should decide what they want to study.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are certain section people who believe that

subject

studied by a

student

should be decided by the government.Whereas, the other section of people trust that students must have

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reedom to make a choice of the

subject

they would like to study

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. There has been a rise in unemployment since

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ast few decades.

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it has been observed that demand for

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orkforce is high in comparison to the supply in certain sectors and vice versa.

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,It is observed a shortage of doctors and scientists in our country.

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, there are many unemployed MBA degree holders. If the government selects the career path for each

student

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imbalance of the workforce would be corrected. In

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way

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the class of 50

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will eventually be divided into

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qual number of doctors, teachers,lawyers etc.

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BA and Engineers. On the flip side, if a

student

is not passionate

towards

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the

subject

assigned, there are higher chances for failure.A

student

may

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loose

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focus and interest in studies which

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forced upon.

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will eventually lead to

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igher number of dropouts and the country will have

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ow ratio of professionals compared to other countries.

For instance

, A

student

pressurized to study medicine will ultimately become a frustrated doctor and will risk other people's lives. Whereas liberty to study as per individual interest will motivate the

student

to achieve excellence in the career path. Pupil if studying the choice of

subject

will

definately

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definitely

learn and work with full dedication and determination. In my

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opinion

, Education plays an important role in shaping a person’s life. career choice should not be enforced on any

student

as it is a fundamental right of a

student

to choose the

subject

and pursue the line of work.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people say that government should decide what subjects a student can study, while other believe the students should decide what they want to study.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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