Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Although
it is sometimes thought that tertiary education is the key to succeed in getting
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ell-paid job, others believe that gaining
experience
and developing soft skills are more critical. On the one hand, it is often believed that higher education is a great means of landing
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ucrative job due to the common conception that university graduates are more reliable and knowledgeable.
In other words
, it is ubiquitous midst the society that employees with university qualification can be trusted with more responsible roles.
Furthermore
, it is almost impossible to land a
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job in any academic field without higher education.
For instance
, In order to pursue a career as a doctor, having
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ualification is strictly requested in
this
profession.
On the other hand
, some people think that recruiters are prone to hire an applicant with relevant work
experience
rather than one with an academic degree in any industry apart from the scholastic world and I agree. Take
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usiness industry,
for instance
. Business workers tend to be picked out according to their abilities and skills not for graduating from college.
Moreover
, owing to the rapid developments, the most sought after jobs of today rely on the
experience
and skills of the workforce. IT world is a shining example of
this
. There are myriad members of IT staff out there without
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niversity diploma, yet are valued as much
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workers.
Thus
,
experience
and personal capabilities are far more
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when it comes to recruiting for high profile employments. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I consider that getting training and developing personal attributes are far more treasured.
Therefore
, it is recommended for
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applicants to focus on acquiring expertise.
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