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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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ecessary knowledge and skills which are needed for the
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 a conclusion. In today's scenario getting the right
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job
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ob. One more instance is of
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ew start-up called Whitehat junior, where they teach children at the early age of six about coding and computers. As these skills are required in
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dge over others and they will have time to develop other skills as well.
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morality and a good responsible person. It's not enough to have hard skills in
life
, a person should
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 possess some soft skills which are necessary to endeavour in career, like being polite and respectful to others. As
life
 is a journey of up's and down's it is very important to face tough situations, schools can teach children how to handle these problems in a positive way. To conclude, educational institutions should not only equip students with hard skills for
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