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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today's world?

#money #world
Money
 is one of the essential things in our life, some people can afford good
money
 or some can't. So saving is a good option as compared to spending it. I totally agree with
this
 statement.
firstly
, some people like to spend
money
 here and there for their interests as well as for show off. In today's world,those people are smart who saves
money
. Our savings are our backup. it helps to grow up. if someone who do not have savings
that is
 not good for their future.
likewise
,
in
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this
 year everyone is facing tough time no one has enough
money
 and works so most of the forks survived with saving because they save their
money
 rather than spend it. some people open
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ew business in
this
 tough time because of savings
Moreover
, very few people know the value of savings. people who spend
money
 a lot are those who just care about the present they don't worry about
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uture. Saving is very important some youngsters learned how to do saving from childhood.
For example
, very few students can save their pocket
money
 and
that is
 a very good habit. The small amount of saving can lead
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a big saving. It is hard to do saving but in the market
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we can get easy ideas
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how to save
money
. There are some books available in the market and
i
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nternet is one of the greatest options. Overall, savings are
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good
essert
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dessert
 rather than spending it. Spend
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money
 is good but spend on useful things. In our life
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we go through so many hard times so someway
money
 protect from those up and downs. In
this
 time you can get everything from
money
 but you need to get some savings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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