These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, television channels have started showing a lot of abusive activities
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people. Even
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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can view and get influenced by watching
such
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ct. In my opinion, I agree that
this
demonstration of hatred is wrongly affecting the
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children
childrens
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children
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.
Such
violent content can not only provoke them to follow the same path
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but
also
disconnects them from others which can have
long lasting
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effects. One of the main
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of showing violence
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children is that they will try to imitate the crime without understanding the consequences.
For example
, many action movies involve physical fights,
this
can encourage kids to physically abuse others.
As a result
, children's might get involved in serious crime and could even face severe punishment which might impact their future.
Hence
,
such
behaviour can spoil potential children's life.
Secondly
, kids might fear to trust anybody and create
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uspicious image of people who try to be friendly .
For instance
,some crime stories are based on
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incidents involving abuse from friends and relatives that children feel relatable.
That is
why
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 they start building
an negative thoughts
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about people around them.
As a result
,children might prefer to stay isolated because of the misconception they create after watching shows. In conclusion, children's can become very sensitive after watching abusive content. They might either take interest in
such
tasks or choose to stay away everyone assuming that they might get caught up in
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violence
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