These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, television channels have started showing a lot of abusive activities

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people. Even

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children

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children

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can view and get influenced by watching

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demonstration of hatred is wrongly affecting the

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children

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violent content can not only provoke them to follow the same path

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disconnects them from others which can have

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effects. One of the main

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of showing violence

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children is that they will try to imitate the crime without understanding the consequences.

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, many action movies involve physical fights,

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can encourage kids to physically abuse others.

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, children's might get involved in serious crime and could even face severe punishment which might impact their future.

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behaviour can spoil potential children's life.

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, kids might fear to trust anybody and create

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uspicious image of people who try to be friendly .

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,some crime stories are based on

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incidents involving abuse from friends and relatives that children feel relatable.

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they start building

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about people around them.

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,children might prefer to stay isolated because of the misconception they create after watching shows. In conclusion, children's can become very sensitive after watching abusive content. They might either take interest in

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tasks or choose to stay away everyone assuming that they might get caught up in

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violence

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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231 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

desensitize
mimicking
aggressive
idolize
fear or anxiety
social interactions
mental health
proactive
supervision
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These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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