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Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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 is not an easy initiative, many people have been suggesting that when they are becoming adults, moving out of their hometowns is a wise idea, while others want to live forever in their hometowns.
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 essay will discuss both ideas and it will state that despite all the adventures and positives experiences that living far away
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home
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 could offer, there is no other place like
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 to live a remarkable life. Live far away from your family is quite challenging but equally rewarding. By going out of your comfort zone, sometimes you could feel homesickness, but soon you will be able to know better yourself and earn awareness about your
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strengths
, weaknesses and the future that you would create.
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, more than sixty per cent of the inventors in the
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, there is no room for doubts that
hapiness
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happiness
 depends on many dimension and does not just rely on the career aspect. It
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 that one of the most crucial
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 is the quality of your relationships.
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, staying close
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 your friends and relatives could improve your relationships, while your satisfaction and welfare could be enhanced positively.
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, human beings are social animals, our desire is to be accepted by others and being a part of a community. As a consequence, there is not another similar sentiment like to be in your
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.
Hapiness
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Happiness
 could thrive in
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 place or close to there
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 because you are part of something greater than you. In conclusion,
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 essay has surveyed the idea of moving out of
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ome to live an adult life as well as the idea of living forever
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 your hometown. The essay
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 pointed out both views by indicating at the end that there is not another place like your hometown to spend a memorable lifetime.
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