First impressions are more important. Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing good job? To what extent do you agree?

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getting a dream job can be an arduous task. It is widely speculated that the
first
impression is an essential component to succeed in an
interview
to get the ideal employment. I am a strong advocate of
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approach and
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essay will outline the reasons supporting the argument.  The present society can be exceedingly judgmental.
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lean appearance is important to acquire the ideal occupation one prefer
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since it will have a direct impact on building
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irst impression. For an instance,
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ecent study reveals smart looking gentleman will have
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igh chance of landing his dream job as compared to a person who is not well dressed.
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, the clean outlook of an individual is crucial and it aids to boost the opportunity of getting recruited to a big company.
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, polite mannerism in an
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can be vital to impress the superior officers.
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, being disciplined can be considered as an important aspect because it aids to build relationships in the workplace. For
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example, in Japan
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it is well established that proper mannerism is
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and candidates who are rude should never be hired.
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, being polite can be an advantage to excel in interviews. In conclusion, the general public
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impressions in
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nterview can play a major role to determine on getting a good job. The smart appearance of a person and impeccable discipline can aid an individual to be
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in an
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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