As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.

It is evident that the advancement of technology has made significant contributions to a variety of fields. In recent years, computers have evolved remarkably and it has been used as an alternative method for human labour work.
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devices and the problems may result
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using technologically advanced
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their jobs at an alarming rate.
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volution of science.
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rogression of technology
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its own negative aspects and have a direct impact on the general public unemployment. Computers can be beneficial to
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modern society, but the
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use can have repercussions on
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their export on manufacturing clothes.
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access to high tech devices, prominent nations will be reluctant to import items since it is
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suitable to seek a substitute method to diminish the number of imports.
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contributed in many ways, it has a dreadful influence on developing nations economy. In conclusion, as the world makes notable progression in the field of science there are awful consequences. It can result in
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among the labourers and will have a blatant effect on the economies of the rising countries across the globe.
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