There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -describe the complaints that have been made - say why the reception area is important - say why the reception area could be improved
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you in order to discuss our company's meeting zone. Unfortunately, we got a huge part of emails about our reception from the
partners
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partner's
partners'
las
week. Correct your spelling
last
Consequently
, I believe we must take some measures.
I had learned all letters which clients wrote and I made some statistics for you about what they are unpleasant. First
of all, there is the small space, if we have some conferencions
with lots of competitors, they can't fully have Correct your spelling
conferences
conferencing
relax
and enjoy their some free time. Change the verb form
relaxed
Secondly
, they applied about bad
air-conditioned system, as we live in Add an article
the bad
warm
climate, they want to breeze lightly in our office. Add an article
a warm
Third
reason is not enough staff at our information desk, only one lady can't service everyone.
After my analysation of Add an article
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the situation
situation
I was searching on the Internet whole 2 days and came with Add a comma
,situation
opinion
how the reception in companies is really important. To start with, it is Correct article usage
an opinion
a
face of Correct article usage
the
company
, Add an article
the company
a company
it's
association Correct your spelling
its
about
us, Change preposition
with
first
impression, after which people will give points to us.
I would like to advice
some challenges which we could do: Replace the word
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firstly
, do more open-space territory, buying new tables, sofas, also
we could think about some coffee-break. Then
, it is important to renovate our air-conditioned system fully, because we hadn't done it since 2018
year. Change the article
the 2018
Lastly
, we should open additionally
2 new positions to have more staff at our reception or recruiting them on temporary
job for big events.
I am looking forward to answering from you.
Best regards,
MariaAdd an article
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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