There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -describe the complaints that have been made - say why the reception area is important - say why the reception area could be improved

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you in order to discuss our company's meeting zone. Unfortunately, we got a huge part of emails about our reception from the
partners
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las
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week.
Consequently
, I believe we must take some measures. I had learned all letters which clients wrote and I made some statistics for you about what they are unpleasant.
First
of all, there is the small space, if we have some
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conferences
conferencing
with lots of competitors, they can't fully have
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and enjoy their some free time.
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, they applied about
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air-conditioned system, as we live in
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climate, they want to breeze lightly in our office.
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reason is not enough staff at our information desk, only one lady can't service everyone. After my analysation of
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situation
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I was searching on the Internet whole 2 days and came with
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how the reception in companies is really important. To start with, it is
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face of
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,
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association
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us,
first
impression, after which people will give points to us. I would like to
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some challenges which we could do:
firstly
, do more open-space territory, buying new tables, sofas,
also
we could think about some coffee-break.
Then
, it is important to renovate our air-conditioned system fully, because we hadn't done it since
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year.
Lastly
, we should open
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2 new positions to have more staff at our reception or recruiting them on
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job for big events. I am looking forward to answering from you. Best regards, Maria
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