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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
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modern society, many people go abroad for their vacation and
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. Because compared to
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ew decades ago, international
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 is not vastly difficult these days.
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, some people say
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 to abroad makes tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Obvious, there are pros and cons in the increased international
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industry
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. But, I believe there are more positive senses. So, I totally disagree with
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industry
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, people who have experienced
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abroad are more optimistic. Because they have to experience something new even they do not want. Every
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 has their own traditional cultures.
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, some countries eat food without spoons or forks. After they get special experienced, most people's perception would be changed to positive sides.
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, when they find new interesting cultures, they want
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learn more about the
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 include history and the language of the
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. It will lead to a good relationship between the two countries. On condition that two countries' relationship is good, it
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 good in their trade
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.
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's economic system will be increased because of the good rapport between
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wo countries. In conclusion, there is no doubt
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 to abroad is easier than before these days.
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, there are pros and cons.
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, In my opinion, increase international
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industry
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 has more benefits.
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, people make more optimistical.
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, good relationship consequence of positively experienced in a new
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 and culture can lead to increase
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's economic system.
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