Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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, which I agree.
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a fair high price for losing their
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work its because daily we can see the amount in News, blogs, and all the social media in the whole world.
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“normal” life we usually do not like to expose, even with close friends.
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illustrate we can remember all Britney Spears life since she was a little kid, we all know in details her life than we usually know our
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stars frequently lose their
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working hard in several shifts, its not hard even to say more than 48 hours, usually losing Family memories, holidays and others important celebrate dates. In
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, I believe that famous people are paid too much.
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, those people and doctors are highly paid because they lose their private
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. Give
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a high price.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue generation
  • Supply and demand
  • Influence on culture
  • Trendsetters
  • Income disparity
  • Essential workers
  • Critical role
  • Public health
  • Endorsements
  • Economies
  • Compensation
  • Significant contribution
  • Technological advancements
  • Global challenges
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