Some people say that self employment is better than job in a country or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your opinion.

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its better to be
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rather than working for any organization.In
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we will discuss
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ros and cons of both
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and Individual job.
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is for the people who will take
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isk. To illustrate being
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on yourself will be more
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beneficial
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as one will get all the profit which was earned.
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you don't have to worry about
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olidays. If you want to take any holiday you don't need boss permission.
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you
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don't
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self employed
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is one of the best
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for living.
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