Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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It is argued by some that children only allow
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educational activities during their free
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, I completely disagree with the statement and will discuss how
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ntroduction of other activities help children to build imagination and creativity as well as their overall health being.
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with, children in their free
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want to indulge themselves
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entertaintment
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entertainment
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as playing video games, watching television and reading comic books of their favourite character. By doing
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, it would assist them in
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evelopment of imagination and improve their creative skills.
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ecent study by
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child association
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found that children who participate in their favourite leisure activities help in
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mprovement of grades in school because giving little freedom, most
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understand
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the balance between study and free
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. There are some children who spent their spare
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in little physical activities like riding
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icycle, jumping on
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trampoline
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. Involving some sort of
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physical
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work would help in building their muscular strength and improve mental health.
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, children who spent
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their
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in sport could improve their overall health. To conclude, it is essential for children to consume their free
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in amusement and fitness games rather than spending on educational games.
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