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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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It is argued by some that children only allow
to do
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 educational activities during their free
time
.
However
, I completely disagree with the statement and will discuss how
i
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ntroduction of other activities help children to build imagination and creativity as well as their overall health being.
To begin
 with, children in their free
time
 want to indulge themselves
into
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entertaintment
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entertainment
 activities
such
 as playing video games, watching television and reading comic books of their favourite character. By doing
this
, it would assist them in
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evelopment of imagination and improve their creative skills.
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,
r
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ecent study by
american
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 child association
center
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 found that children who participate in their favourite leisure activities help in
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mprovement of grades in school because giving little freedom, most
pupil
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understand
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 the balance between study and free
time
. There are some children who spent their spare
time
 in little physical activities like riding
b
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icycle, jumping on
trempoline
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trampoline
trampolines
. Involving some sort of
physic al
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physical
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 work would help in building their muscular strength and improve mental health.
For example
, children who spent
thier
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their
 free
time
 in sport could improve their overall health. To conclude, it is essential for children to consume their free
time
 in amusement and fitness games rather than spending on educational games.
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