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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A handful of people believe that foreigners should adopt the local tradition and rituals of the visiting agrarian, while other say the welcoming provincial ought to get permission to live foreigner according to their culture and native of host country encourages the cultural differences.
This
 essay would elucidate to both the opinion before making any a final note. on the one hand, the individuals say visitors have to obey the rules of their nation's tradition and act according to the rustic's people lifestyle due to the fear of losing their prevailing historic customs.
In other words
, it is assumed that if outsiders would come with their culture in the country where they came to visit could replace their ancestors living styles.
For Example
- In India, mostly masses do not accept the change of western culture, since they think it would be the cause of less importance to their own religion.
As a result
, a number of human beings oppose the concept of the multicultural country and suggest the visitors follow their local trend.
on the other hand
, some agree with the cultural differences, since every person has the right to live as his/her desire and host should give respect to the newcomers
also
.
That is
 to say,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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