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Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher, others say that student attitudes also do matters.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Teachers are the best tutors and are amongst the most respected one's in our life because most of our
success
 depends upon our education.
On the other hand
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people are of the opinion that the
student
 attitudes
also
 matters.
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 is like both sides of
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oin. Teachers do play a pivotal role in accumulating
success
 by an individual by teaching him/her the lessons of life throughout their academics.
For example
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if there is no
teacher
 people will not be able to study on their own. But at the same time
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the
attitude
 of the
student
also
 matters to achieve
success
. As there
is
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 different attitudes towards studies of different students. A studious and promising
student
have
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 the
attitude
 to study will automatically have
a
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 interest and only
then
 will pay attention
towards
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 what is being taught by the
teacher
. But
on the contrary
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a
student
 with
n
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egative
attitude
 towards studies won't even listen to the
teacher
.
Hence
 as per opinion is concerned, I personally believe that its the
attitude
 of the
student
 which matters the most because the
teacher
 is always equal with every
student
 of the class but its the real
attitude
 of the
student
 which either makes or breaks his
success
.
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