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In order to learn the way other people in the world lives, it is better to look at film and video records than written documents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that it is better to watch movie and
video
 records to learn the
way
 other people in the
world
 than read written documents. I agree to a certain extent with
this
 view. While there may be drawbacks with looking at films in the past, it seems to me that it is more likely to have beneficial impacts. On the one hand, looking at written documents was
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etter method to learn the
way
 other people in the
world
 lives in the past.
Firstly
, most documents which ordinary people can access are written ones.
As a result
, these people can look at them in order to know about the
way
 other people in the
world
 lives.
Secondly
, when people publish, they used written documents most of
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ime.
This
 is because people do not have state-of-art technology
such
 as computers.
On the other hand
, it is better to know about the
way
 other people in the
world
 through
video
 records now. The
first
 reason for
this
 is that thanks to
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technological development, many people can access to the internet which allows them to easily obtain information.
Additionally
, people can visually understand looking at films and
video
 records.
For example
, even though people do not know other foreign languages, picture in the films could help them to understand the contents. In conclusion, while it is true that written documents were useful in the past, in my opinion, the advantages of
this
 looking at films and
video
 record to learn the
way
 other people in the
world
 outweigh the disadvantages
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people can access more to the pictured documents which
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 easier to understand for them.
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