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The teaching situation of teacher and students in a classroom will no longer exist by the year of 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the recent technological development
such
 as the internet, it is common for us to take online lessons anytime and anywhere. Some people argue that teaching style in the physical
classroom
 will disappear by 2050, but I completely disagree with
this
 view for the following two reasons.
Firstly
, face-to-face communication is necessary in order to provide quality education, as schoolchildren can more focus on lessons in the actual
classroom
 than
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nline one. In the physical
classroom
, instructors can monitor and encourage all students to study using physical contact in case teaching
further
 to understand or praise students’ achievement.
In addition
 to that, unlike the online
classroom
, students can ask teachers and their
classmates
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 questions before and after classes, which helps them to be clear
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 their study.
Secondly
, some skills need to be leaned through hands-on experience. Though mathematics and science can be learned online, skills that are required to be a nurse or hairdresser can only be learned in the physical
classroom
. Those who aspire to be a nurse acquire injection skills, by learning the right site and depth to insert needles, and
therefore
, to learn in person with touching the area and interact with teachers and other students are essential for students who obtain new skills. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion that the teaching circumstances of teachers and learners in a
classroom
 will vanish by 2050 because there are several positive aspects which only in-person lectures have for people
such
 as children and students who acquire skills.
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