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It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent to do agree or disagree

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It is not beneficial or feasible to offer university admissions to the majority of youngsters. From my perspective, I agree with the statement that over the top admissions at the university level will not be manageable and fruitful.
Firstly
. Bachelor degree is no longer an integral part of a person's future in having a secure job. Alternates like vocational training or correspondence courses are becoming a viable choice of teenagers in many countries. It's a cheaper and time-saving option where students don't have to spend three to four years in colleges.
Moreover
, allowing
access
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ertiary level of
education
 to everybody will require opening more universities which will
further
 be a burden on the workforce of tutors, professors and teachers and
also
 on a country's economy. It
also
 impacts work-life balance, quality of jobs and much more which would be clearly visible in future. Unmatched demand-supply will eventually allow the organisation to treat the employees as resources and not as human beings.
In addition
 to
this
, it will
also
 impact the quality of
education
 being provided to the students which will
further
 be problematic for both individual and society.
Secondly
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overnment to provide all the sources to
access
 the higher
education
 would not be possible.
Hence
,
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nclusion of private industry would be necessary. Which accounts for opening more number of private colleges and universities.
This
further
 restricts the
access
 only to a privileged sector. The unaccounted growth of the
education
 sector will be the reason for increasing unemployment for teachers and professors. In recent pandemic times, the jobless rates for teachers and tutors are alarming and need to check. To conclude,
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rosperity of a country lies in the literate population and
education
 system
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uncontrolled
access
 to tertiary
education
 to everybody will lead to chaos and unprecedented pressure on the country's economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resources
  • quality of education
  • strained resources
  • job market
  • underemployment
  • competition for skilled jobs
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • economic constraints
  • public budgets
  • inefficiencies
  • devalue
  • significance
  • perceived quality
  • universal access
  • diversity in skills
  • balanced society
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