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As computers translate quickly and accurately, is learning foreign languages a waste of time? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #languages #waste #time
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Some people adhere to the opinion that
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asy and faster form of translating one language to
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 why people want to waste their time for learning new
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, I completely disagree with
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 notion because people have hobby and curiosity to learn various languages which are spoken in whole around the
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 small a place for human because of advance and rapid technology. Through knowing various languages, people have plenty of opportunities to travel anywhere in the
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 and know about
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 cultures, languages, history, and traditions. Whereas, by using computers, it would be not possible for
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ourist to completely know about local cultures, history, and traditions.
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, many western people are learning Indian languages to know about Indian festivals and history.
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, people are working in multinational companies or want to expand their
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business
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, they have to learn foreign languages because they have to build
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tronger relation with foreign people.
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, amazon and google have employees from all around the
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. All workers should have good
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command
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 English languages, so they can attend
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eeting and work together. On the hand, it is not mandatory for people to know other languages because they can
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communicate
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elation with
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ew language because every time they do not want to use computers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Computers are proficient in certain domains but struggle with complex language nuances
  • Machine translation lacks human touch and may not capture context accurately
  • Learning a foreign language is a valuable investment in personal development
  • Language learning fosters empathy and appreciation for different cultures
  • Multilingual individuals are in high demand in the job market
  • Acquiring new languages expands one's horizons and opens doors to new opportunities
  • Bilingualism enhances cognitive flexibility and problem-solving abilities
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