most high level job done by men, should the government encourage certain percentage of these jobs to be reserve for womens.

Nevertheless
, in today's era women are playing
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qual part in every field either it
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manufacturing or services, as their male counterpart. Yet there are many high ranked posts which are still dominated by men.
Hence
, it is needed that
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ertain number of these jobs are booked for women by the administration. The subsequent paragraphs will delve with
this
issue along with some relevant example.
To begin
with, the
first
and the foremost, career success and choice depends upon individual merits, providing men and women access to
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ame professional opportunities.  
However
, gender is considered as
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eciding factor when it comes to profession,
instead
of a person's talent.
For example
, most of the high-ranked posts in defence are occupied by men, while women are employed at
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perational part.
As a result
, females are mostly deprived
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the post and position that they deserve even after outperforming the male staff.
Furthermore
, traditionally women are restricted to some particular roles,
such
as,  to manage family, but if she has to work,
then
all the work she can do is operational jobs behind the desk but is excluded from decision-making roles.
Therefore
, it is essential that the government should reserve some jobs for women and allowing them to contribute
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decisions, and giving orders.  It will
also
bring them at par with their counterparts of opposite gender in these jobs, resulting
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the end of the male dominance of being decision-makers. To conclude, in my opinion,
this
is true that women have done considerably well in almost all the field yet, they have been denied the positions and posts they deserve citing their gender.  The government should provide certain reservations to women, as it will uplift their status providing them professional cum social equality, bridging the gap created by
this
male dominance in high profile jobs.
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