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: Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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There is a widespread belief that any prospective forms of global warming will be harmful to
business
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. In my opinion, serve
weather
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 may negatively affect
business
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 while it benefits eco-friendly companies. Global warming affects directly a
change
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 of costs and resource availability, creating an extreme condition for unsustainable
business
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.
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 condition increases the frequency and intensities of extreme
weather
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 events
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 as floods, storms, and droughts, which
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 disrupt the operation of the
business
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. Serve drought and
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 pattern changes cause a shortage of crops used for food or apparel products, along with an increase in transportation expenses. Mainly, serve
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 is a reason that
climate
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change
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 is a risk for a
business
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 in terms of physical and financial damage. Others argue that
climate
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change
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 is beneficial for eco-friendly businesses. As
climate
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change
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, customer demand in the market will simultaneously shift. The customer will be more conscious of environmental protection, increasing the choice of green products. A justification is that a large global movement to reduce the use of plastic bags is profitable for paper-bag produced companies.
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, a
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 that provides bike rentals or sells eco-friendly vehicles will surprisingly increase the sale due to a
change
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 of sustainable transports during
climate
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change
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. Indeed, whether policies regarding
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change
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 affect the
business
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 positively or negatively is subject to the type of
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 they are doing. On the one hand, businesses that traditionally produced eco-unfriendly items might suffer from the
change
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, including public pressure.
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, green businesses might benefit from
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 political moves. Neither all companies would suffer nor benefit from a certain
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 of the state. In conclusion, the green
business
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 model may take advantage of
climate
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change
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 while eco-unfriendly will face
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 damage.
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