You need to borrow some money to pay for something you need for your work or studies. Write a letter to your bank to ask for a loan. In your letter introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money explain how you plan to pay the money back

Dear sir \ madam, I am writing to you asking for a loan, which

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for educational purposes. Gladly, I graduated a few months ago, owning a bachelor's degree in pharmacy. Now, aiming to gain

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study, which will expand my future career.

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, $ 30,000

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as a loan from your bank. Indeed, In spite of the low wages that the pharmacist earns, but having a post-graduate diploma allows me to land a vocation of a higher income from the outset.

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, was a Healthcare Management course study, being able to apply for an administrative position, a career progression is chanced, with a higher opportunity to rise through the company's rank, which my desire will be satisfied. Important to realize, Being a full-time student, working

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part-time is abled concurrently. So, pay off the credit is allowed, which has borrowed from the bank. It will be appreciated if I have

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affordable instalment. I am looking forward to your agreement on my loan application. Kind regards, Aya Ahmad

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