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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society.

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There is no doubt that the number of
science
 majors is decreasing
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 respect to other majors.
This
 trend has been gaining popularity these days and causing many problems. In
this
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rend
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 to its consequences. One of the most significant reasons
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 the problem of lacking students who are specialising in
science
 is that they were not learning in
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roper way in high school.
As a result
 of
this
, when the time came for university they choose any subjects to be specialized in except
science
.
Secondly
,
science
 is one of the most difficult and effort-consuming subjects, As a consequence of
this
, there are many students avoid being
science
 specialists. Turning to the consequences of lacking
science
 specialists in society.
Although
this
 issue has many detrimental effects,
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the most significant effect is that,it
lead
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 to less new inventions in the country, and
this
 is essential to the prosperity of the country. Another point is that
this
 reducing in
these kind
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 of students
has
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 a bad influence on
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ountry's economy because
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overnment will have to import scientists from other countries to recover lacking in these majors. In conclusion,
Although
science
 subject is tough and demanding subject and need a lot of effort to be scientist and specialist,
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the whole world in need to
this
 kind of majors in order to develop and improve scientifically and economically.
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