Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

Technology as one of the most important factors to boost
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evelopment of our society, but facing the
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shortage in university now. In my opinion, the phenomenon of insufficient scientific students may
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aused by
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reconception of human beings. One of
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preconception
is the stereotype on
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cience-related occupation that most people, affected by the previous thought that people who worked in a
science
-related place got less paid usually .
For instance
, the
income
level.The majority of college applicants perceive
science
as a route to earn mediocre
income
. But nowadays, one of the most essential reasons to receive high education is to find high-paid professions.
Therefore
, many students who have interest in
science
may adopt remuneration as
first
criteria rather than their aptitude on
science
when they choose major.
Consequently
, imbalanced of the number of students in different major will cause uneven distribution of
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ob market. The number of social-
science
graduates overweight and unemployed, but
science
companies
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to find skilled
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. Another reason for insufficient
science
students spreads wider. In conservative cognition of male and female in the workplace , males always are recognized as
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etter choice at the technological realm, for scientists, and women are less capable
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science
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social and economic development, majority of
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had been abandoned , and male and female are equally capable in
science
, people’s mind still not emancipated totally, which means the majority of female still tend to choose to major in non-scientific subjects. So
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,
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ollege will lose a considerable number of female applicants , and the
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companies and workplace will be continuously dominated by male. Lack of gender diversity may impede
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evelopment of
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cience industry . In conclusion, today the
income
of being a technician has increased a lot though, applicants for
science
-related major are still in a
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,due to the fact that the stereotype of
science
’s jobs
income
and
preconception
in
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apability of
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ifferent gender. If
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preconception
cannot be adjusted, the society will be imbalanced.
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our society may be stagnant as one of the most significant factor technology being ignored by most females. lose of new ideas and energy.
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