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In the past, the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is, therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

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Whilst in the bygone era, teacher’s duty was to give
information
 to the pupils, there is no space for them in
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resent education system; students can obtain required knowledge from varieties of sources accessible to them.
This
 essay completely
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 with the view and I intend to justify
this
further
 in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, a teacher’s
role
 is not just to make the necessary
information
 available to the pupils; they have a crucial
role
 in translating the
information
 and making it understandable.
Furthermore
, they
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 that it is understood by each and every student.
For instance
, studies show that approximately 40% of students who pursued distance learning higher education had difficulty in passing
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ractical examination as compared to 10% of those who attended face to face schools and learned from teachers.
In addition
 to that, teachers have a crucial
role
 in encouraging and motivating
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students. So
that
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, those who do not have
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nterest or are lazy, can be pushed towards success with a little extra effort. To exemplify, as per the latest survey it has been seen that those who could not
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 their exams with distance learning when attended schools got passed easily and in an interview
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approximately 40% of them have appreciated the motivation they got from their teachers. To conclude, even though pupils can obtain
information
 from varieties of sources available and accessible to everyone, presence of
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eacher is quintessential as apart from providing
information
 they have
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ital
role
 in making it understandable and encouraging students.
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