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Nowadays many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children? .

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Due to revolution in technology, almost everybody has access to technical gadgets be it
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aptop, mobile or tablet. Kids love to sit in front of the screen and play games all day long. which have its own drawbacks. Not only it affects mental and physical health; it is waste of
time
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However
, if there is a balance found for children to play games and to do other activities it is not harmful. Games have adverse effects on children's physical health. If a kid is playing an online game all the
time
, that means he would spend less
time
 doing any physical activity.
Moreover
, there are some virtual games which are very violent. That would push our youth to grow up as criminals.
Additionally
, games are potential distractions, kids might lose their valuable
time
 by playing games while that
time
 should be spent on studies or on other activity. There are some games which can be helpful for mental health. Parents or teacher can play
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ery important role to recommend those games. Nowadays, some games
also
 help you to make money. For kids,it would be like killing two birds with one stone. They can have their hobby while earning money.
Although
, negative points outweigh positive points to play games. Games can still play a vital role to help our children to grow up as a better human being. Elders should play their role to choose games for children.
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