Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality bring problem as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems.

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daily
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we read more and more stories about famous personalities in which we get to know about their daily
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.
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, Being a
super star
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means living a
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full of luxury and travel all around but,
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, being
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popular means no privacy in
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where it can be a stressful thing. In
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essay, advantages and
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disadvantages
will be discussed more briefly. Having a well-known
person
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bring many benefits where
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as, a superstar can
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live
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a healthy and wealthy
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healthy and wealthy life styles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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in which the
person
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can purchase anything he wants with the luxury items.
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, a famous
person
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is capable of doing
any thing
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anything
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, if the
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is doing
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acting he is very well-known through the acting because everyone in the country is watching him where ever he goes people recognise him, admire him and request for
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autographs
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thing makes the celebrity happy.
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, a magnificence
life
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is lived by a celebrity, they can fly
all around
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global where ever they want to.
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, there are many drawbacks
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of having
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amous personality. In
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era, media is too strong now that they got all
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news from somewhere which disturbs the privacy of renowned people as everyone has their privacy
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whether
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they are normal citizens or well-known people.
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, they are unable to enjoy their
life
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like a normal
person
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which
sometime
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makes them exhausted and
stressfull
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stressful
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, a celeb couple is having a child before they break
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news on social media, everyone already aware of
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news because of media. The moment of
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limpse has
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disappear
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um of,
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famous
personality lived with many benefits as they enjoyed their
life
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in various ways, on the other side, living with no seclusion where a
person
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need
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their own time
with out
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without
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coming on big screens disturbs
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a lot
lot
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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