You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you with regards to the recent purchase of a Nikon D70 camera from your Carlingford store on December 31, 2020. Only today I have noticed that there are

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of missing parts of the camera. While I paid for a cover to protect the lenses and a set of four batteries, they have not been actually included in the box. I recall the salesperson displayed all items to me when deciding on the purchase but perhaps missed to

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for a final time. Would you kindly send the missing items to me urgently to my address? I’ve just come for

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in Bali and I am happy to be charged for the postal fees. Can you imagine a holiday without a single picture? I look forward to hearing from you. Thank you very much for your consideration. Yours faithfully, John Smith

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
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8 paragraphs

150 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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