Some people say material possessions are very useful in bringing us happiness, but others argue that they are useless in terms of providing happiness. discuss both views and give your opinion and reasons,

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People are of the opinion that earthly possessions are a major cause of
happiness
while
others hold a different view, arguing that wealth holds no value in bringing about
joy
.
Although
material
possesions
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may be a
source
of euphoria, it does not provide permanent satisfaction and may be associated with sadness. Both views
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be
further
discussed and my opinion
given
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.
Happiness
is a derivative of earthly possessions, as believed by certain individuals. Achieving a milestone or completing a project
such
as building a mansion,
completing
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a family size brings gladness to the heart of men which they hold on to for a long period of time.
For instance
, a cousin of mine who was overjoyed at his recent appointment as the governor of Benue state, though tasked with many responsibilities, was glad
having
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achieved
such
feat
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. He threw a grand party in celebration of his prosperity.
In addition
, simple momentary things, like a gift, purchasing a car or
exceling
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excelling
at an examination can be a vital
source
of
joy
to individuals. In my viewpoint, wealth and earthly
possesions
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possessions
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play a role in generating
happiness
, but it is short-lived.
On the other hand
, a different view of wealth not contributing to
happiness
is held by some individuals.
Mans
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Mans's
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wants are insatiable and constantly
changes
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from time to time,
this
delight is subjective.
Happiness
may occur following an achievement but it is temporary as another task is set, failure to fulfill
such
task
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may
subsequently
result in sadness which eventually leads to a depressed state.
For example
, a friend who failed an examination following the loss of his mum became depressed and almost committed suicide, but for the intervention of family members. In my point of view,
happiness
should be derived from an eternal
source
that changeth not.
Thus
, irrespective of life's situation, one
joy
is full. In conclusion, material
possesion
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possession
possessions
may contribute temporarily to
happiness
,
such
joy
is
short lived
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short-lived
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as
mans
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man's
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want fluctuates
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wants fluctuate
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and vanity equals vanity. God is the main
source
of everlasting
joy
.
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