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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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According to a stratum of society, individuals are being characterised as worthy by seeing their societal
status
 and the material possessions they own while,
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traditional
 principles like benevolence and respect have lost its significance. I vehemently agree with the above notion. In the upcoming paragraphs, the reasons for my stance will be elucidated. The modern epoch is witnessing a humongous change in people's attitudes and their principles with regards to how they represent themselves in
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society. In order to show how worthful they are, they begin to buy luxurious cars, pricey phones, extravagant outfits and
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.
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, putting themselves into a materialistic state of mind has become a sign of self-motivation for them which in turn leads them to
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 and fall into heavy debts. Ultimately, they see the person's
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usefulness
 with their financial
status
 and the luxuries they have.
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,
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mankind more selfish and extremely prudish as they
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 their money as their most powerful weapon that they can use it for or against anyone. The basic etiquettes and values of honour, kind-heartedness and loyalty are being considered foolish and ruthless in
this
 cruel world.
This
 generation has somewhere lost its values and principles who
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considered
considers
 social
status
 and sumptuousness their foremost priority. In essence, considering abovesaid, it is irrefutable to claim that the urge to have
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igh
status
 in the community has lessened the importance of morality and humanity.
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Therefore
, it is high time to consider our principles
first
 before treating someone worthless for being poor else the future seems dark.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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