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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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In today's world,
traffic
 congestion is an extremely difficult problem for commuters around the globe. A 10 minutes office to home ride had become
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 40 minutes or even longer ride, spending
one
's valuable time on roads.
This
 essay will explore some of the causes and recommended practices to reduce
this
 issue. The possible sources for increased
traffic
 could be from several factors.
Firstly
, I consider
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igration of people from urban areas to cities in search of making a living as
one
 of the primary reasons.
This
, in turn, leads to
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an
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ncreased number of vehicles on the road. Based on a recent study conducted by the Transportation Department of London, there is a 20% surge in
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olume of car sale in the United Kingdom each year over the
last
 decade.
Secondly
, failing to adhere to
traffic
 rules is another factor contributing to the waiting time due to
traffic
. The government and
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ublic should be pragmatic about the actions that will solve
this
 issue. The government should encourage using public transport
instead
 of personal vehicles because in my country
one
 will hardly find a co-passenger in a car other than the driver.
In addition
, the
traffic
 control department should implement stringent
traffic
 rules,
for instance
, diverting
traffic
 in peak hours on a particular avenue. In summary, a rapid rise in
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car users is
one
 of a major reason for increasingly pathetic
traffic
 congestion. The government and public should cooperate to reduce the number of vehicles by using public transport.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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