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Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life. Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #job #income #life #work
The given pie chart illustrates the
revenue
 sources and the expenditures of a USA based children’s charity, in 2016. Overall, ‘Donated Food’ accounted for the most common
revenue
 source and the highest expenditures were in ‘Program Services’. Regarding
revenue
 sources in 2016, the most popular source of money was ‘food donation’ which amounted to more than two-fifths, while ‘Government Grants’, ‘Investment Income’ and ‘Other Income’ could not even
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ade up to 1% of the totalled
revenue
 of 53,561,580 dollars. The
next
 popular source of money was from the ‘Community Contributions’ at 10.4% which exceeds program
revenue
 by approximately 8%. In terms of the money spent in 2016, the only significant expenditure was on ‘Program Services’ and accounted for approximately 96% of the totalled financial expenses of that year which was 53,224,896 dollars. Money spent on ‘Fundraising and management’ and ‘General Categories’ were minuscule and accounted for just 2.6% and 1.6 % of the whole expenses respectively.
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