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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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umber of vehicles,
traffic
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hole world,
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assive volume of
traffic
 is a disruption on
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. In
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the reasons
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 the same and a solution to resolve
this
 issue. Rise in numbers of cars on
road
 is an important factor for
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ncrease in
traffic
 nowadays.
However
, people having cars for one individual self actually causes
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urge in
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olume of
traffic
 in the entire world.
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 by E & Y for Europe states that 57% of
traffic
 is because of an individual travelling by a car whereas buses, trains
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 empty.
Therefore
,
this
 problem can be sorted by carpooling, use of public transport, avoiding
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se of cars just for oneself.
Hence
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uge volume of
traffic
 will always be an issue in some places where people tend to prefer travelling by personal cars rather than public transport.
Office
 hubs are more likely to have
traffic
 majorly at
office
 timings. Almost every person has a car and has to reach
office
 on time.
Therefore
,
traffic
 is always high at specific times in these areas.
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 by KPMG reflects, Gurgaon (India) is busiest from 9-11 AM in the mornings and 6-9 PM in the evenings.
However
,
office
 traffics can
also
 be resolved through managing better
office
 timeliness by the employees and better
road
 infrastructure by the government.
This
 will help to reduce and divert
traffic
 via other routes and timings. I would like to end by stating that better measures and steps
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 to be taken by the government to build better
road
 infrastructure, restrict car manufacturing and arrange to assist public transport to help people commute more effectively and efficiently.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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