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Write a letter to your friend about a job opportunity you came across that they might find interesting. In your letter, you should: give some details about the job mention how you came across the job opportunity explain why you feel the job would be suitable for your friend

#friend #job #opportunity
Dear Jack, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am sorry to hear that you lost your job because of
this
 pandemic. I am writing
this
 letter regards to a job
opprtunity
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opportunity
 I got to know from my
collegue
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colleague
 and I believe, you are the right person for it. There is a
vaccancy
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vacancy
 for
senior
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a senior
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 network engineer
postion
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position
 in my company. It is a full-time
postion
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position
 in
Melbourne
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the Melbourne
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 office with all
fringe
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 benefits that our company provides. You need
be
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 in contact with various service providers and troubleshoot their problems. Two days back, after my meeting with HR of the company, he informed me about the
vaccancy
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vacancy
 and asked me
recommend
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eligible
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an eligible
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 person if I know anyone. As the job deals with service provider issues, Cisco certified network engineers are only eligible for
this
postion
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position
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. I know you achieved level 3 Cisco certification and have tons of
exeprience
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experience
. I feel no one is a better choice
to
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this
postion
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position
 than you. If you are
intrested
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interested
 in
this
postion
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position
, please forward your resume to my mail. Waiting for your prompt response.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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