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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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Presently, A large group of
people
 choose to eat fast
food
 for their main courses. From my point of view, there are a
lot
 of drawbacks to eating fast
food
 every day. On the one hand, every country around the world has a
lot
 of fast
food
such
 as hamburgers, pizzas and etc., and
people
 love to eat them in every main dishes because there are many benefits.
Firstly
, it can take away and easy more than eat at restaurants.
Secondly
, the
fast
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food
 price is cheaper than the restaurants.
Lastly
, they can full just
f
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ew junk
food
 because there are many carbohydrates.
For example
, some
people
 do not know what they want to eat, so the main idea that everyone thinks is about fast
food
, so they just buy only a piece of hamburger, they can enough in every meal.
On the other hand
, more and more
people
 believe that eating a
lot
 of fast
food
 is unhealthy because they do not have nutrients more than foods.
For example
, some
people
 who eat a
lot
 kind
this
food
, they will not have
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good
health
such
 as fat problem, so in the main meals, they should
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eat other foods rather than junk
food
 to protect their
health
 and for do not have any
health
 problems in the future. To sum up, in the present, a
lot
 of
people
 choose to eat fast
food
 in every their meal and I think that eating junk
food
 every day has many drawbacks
such
 as
health
 problems.
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