Some people say that rich nations should help poor countries with their basic needs like food and education while others oppose the idea and argue that the poor nation themselves should try to improve their condition. Do you agree with the idea that rich and developed nations should help the poor nations?

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nations
’ welfare is the most crucial part of quality
life
for citizens in that certain country. I completely agree that
the
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governments have an initial role to keep their citizens stay healthy and well-educated.
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statement is supported by
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numerous reason; governments’ basic responsibility and the governments’ authority.
Firstly
, it is noticeable that the basic responsibility of the
government
is to look after their society, especially for people living in under standard of
life
.
Although
it may be true that all of the
nations
should help each other,
however
, the governments should stand in the front line to guaranty their citizens’
life
. In additions, every country in the world has
their
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own income which is collected from many sources
such
as individual income tax and
value added
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tax.
Hence
, the
government
should distribute
this
income in an appropriate way
such
as providing free educations and
health
facilities.
Secondly
, it seems that the quality of a country
rely
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on the way the
government
is governing their society. To return to an earlier point that education and
health
are essential parts of humans’
life
.
Therefore
, the
government
should give their main concentration to these terms. As they have an authority to govern their society, the have to decide a governmental decision to improve the citizens’ quality
life
especially in terms of education and
health
for poorer societies.
Otherwise
, the
nations
will not have an adequate standard of
life
. On in all, the care of poorer
nations
is the main responsibility of the
government
. The most crucial point made so far,
although
the wealthier
nations
should help the other voluntarily, the
government
are playing the significant role to solve
this
problem by deciding governmental decisions in terms of education and
health
.
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