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Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays due to the rapid growth of population
traffic
jam
 is increasing
day
 by
day
 and making the city polluted.
People
 believe that the reason behind
this
 is increased the number of
car
 use for life and work so the
car
 should be banned. I completely agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss how the mushrooming number of
car
 affecting the
environment
 of cities.
People
 believe the
car
 should be banned.
This
 polluting the surroundings due to excessive
traffic
jam
. As the
people
 living in the
environment
 are using a
car
 in their work and live,
traffic
jam
 has become an issue for a healthy
environment
.
For instance
, a recent study concluded that the
the
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 of cars is mushrooming
day
 by
day
 and the
environment
 is polluted because of fuel used by the
car
.
Hence
, along with the increase ratio of populations,
traffic
jam
 is increasing because of the increased percentage of
car
day
 by
day
.
Also
, I believe that if the
car
 was banned
then
this
 will reduce the
traffic
jam
. For
this
, the authority should be fascinated and makes strict rules and regulations.
For example
, the use of a
car
 near the shipping mall or work area should be prohibited which will decrease the
traffic
jam
.
Moreover
, the
people
 awareness programs should be carried out to mitigate the pollution caused by
the
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car
traffic
jam
.
Hence
, in my opinion, the government should make strong rules and regulations and confers focus on
traffic
jam
 issues. They should ban unnecessary use of a
car
 in the living area to make the surrounding healthy without pollution and
traffic
jam
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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