Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

Government supporting arts
such
as music and
cinemasfinancially
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cinema financially

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more than other public services provided in the nation.
However
, some
believethat
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believe that

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investment in the entertainment industry is less important than public service.
Therefore
, it is agreed that authorities must use these funds to
consolidatelocal
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consolidate local

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services
instead
. The need for improvements
such
as medical and
education
facilitiesyet
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facilities
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to be advanced will prove
this
.
Firstly
, no doubt the government has achieved
significantimprovement
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significant improvement

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in the medical field if we compare it with the
last
decade. But still,
someinfrastructures
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some infrastructures
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have not been improved at the expected level,
for instance
,
severalcities
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several cities

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are still lack hospitals, dispensaries, and ambulances for
localswhere
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locals where

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financial support more crucial than recreational activities.
Thus
,
localauthorities
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local authorities

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should raise their awareness in advancing these facilities
thanwasting
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than wasting

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money on arts that people even do not need them.
Secondly
, some part having luxury
education
support
whilepoorer
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while poorer

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province doesn’t.
Education
needs to reach every corner of the city
soevery
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every

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student can acquire one.
For example
, the government should establish
moreschools
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more schools

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and provide all the basic requirements, so
instead
of only focusing
ongrowing
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on growing
growing

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cinemas, they should develop more tuition
centers
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show examples
. In summary, the entertainment industry would not bring
anybenefits
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any benefits
many benefits
any benefit's

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to those who are suffering due to under-developed facilities in
theirlocal
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their local

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areas and if children would not get access to proper
education
they
willfor
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sure face unemployment which will directly impact on county economy.
Although
music and cinemas can
also
be a part of the government’s investment, they should put their higher priorities on local services.
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