Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Government supporting arts
such
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as music and
cinemasfinancially
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cinema financially
more than other public services provided in the nation.
However
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, some
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believe that
investment in the entertainment industry is less important than public service.
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, it is agreed that authorities must use these funds to
consolidatelocal
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consolidate local
services
instead
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. The need for improvements
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as medical and
education
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facilitiesyet
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facilities
facilities yet
to be advanced will prove
this
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.
Firstly
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, no doubt the government has achieved
significantimprovement
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significant improvement
in the medical field if we compare it with the
last
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decade. But still,
someinfrastructures
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some infrastructures
some infrastructure
have not been improved at the expected level,
for instance
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,
severalcities
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several cities
are still lack hospitals, dispensaries, and ambulances for
localswhere
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locals where
financial support more crucial than recreational activities.
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,
localauthorities
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local authorities
should raise their awareness in advancing these facilities
thanwasting
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than wasting
money on arts that people even do not need them.
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, some part having luxury
education
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support
whilepoorer
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while poorer
province doesn’t.
Education
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needs to reach every corner of the city
soevery
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so every
every
student can acquire one.
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, the government should establish
moreschools
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more schools
and provide all the basic requirements, so
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of only focusing
ongrowing
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on growing
growing
cinemas, they should develop more tuition
centers
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. In summary, the entertainment industry would not bring
anybenefits
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any benefits
many benefits
any benefit's
to those who are suffering due to under-developed facilities in
theirlocal
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their local
areas and if children would not get access to proper
education
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they
willfor
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will for
sure face unemployment which will directly impact on county economy.
Although
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music and cinemas can
also
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be a part of the government’s investment, they should put their higher priorities on local services.
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