Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, we are in the fourth industrial revolution in which people usually use
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the
modern forms of communication. While
this
might harm people’s physical health to a number of
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, I still believe that the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages. The main drawback of electronic tools is that people become less physically active due to excessive time spent
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for
such
inventions
. In the workplace, employees are expected to sit down and work almost without breaks in front of the computer’s screen over a long period of time.
This
repeated action on a daily basis can progressively lead to impaired physical mobility or
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angerously increased chance of fatal diseases
such
as diabetes or stroke.
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can
also
be
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adverse impact
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the whole community in the long term, as we will possibly see an increasing number of patients in hospitals suffering from these poor health conditions. Despite the negatives mentioned above, it is my belief that these
inventions
are bringing us more merits than demerits.
Firstly
, they allow an individual to communicate and keep in touch with his family, relatives and friends,
thus
reinforce the relationship among them.
Secondly
, people can be informed about what is happening around the globe, especially those living in remote areas like islands or deserts, simply by turning on a television.
For instance
, if a man chose to live in
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an
absolutely isolated countryside, his life would be in huge trouble and tedious as a consequence of the absence of
such
electronic devices.
Furthermore
,
inventions
like the computer offer a great opportunity for numerous young students to complete lots of online University courses with no need of attending face-to-face classes. In conclusion,
although
I recognize a number of potential dangers of electronically operated devices, it appears that these
inventions
are more beneficial to
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uman being in terms of communication and
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