You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Dear Mr Hudson, I am writing to you with regards to the summer work placement training, which I was going to undertake at the end of
this
semester. The cancellation of
this
programme will potentially create
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a
financial stress for me, and I hope you will consider my situation favourably.
Last
week, our lecture for the Business Analysis course, Mr Davidson, advised us that the company that offered us the opportunity for practical work experience has gone bankrupt and unable to operate under
further
notice.
This
is not only a disappointment for me but a grave economical concern. Due to
this
placement, I cancelled my trip to see my family in Australia and paid a month rent in advance to the landlord. Now my property-owner has left for
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verseas holiday and there is no way I can get my money back. As your school offers summer semester to international students, would you kindly provide me
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an opportunity to work in the school café?
This
employment would rescue me from
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the
financial distress, and I am flexible with any hourly rate. Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely, John Smith

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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