You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Dear Mr Hudson, I am writing to you with regards to the summer work placement training, which I was going to undertake at the end of

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semester. The cancellation of

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programme will potentially create

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financial stress for me, and I hope you will consider my situation favourably.

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week, our lecture for the Business Analysis course, Mr Davidson, advised us that the company that offered us the opportunity for practical work experience has gone bankrupt and

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to operate under

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notice.

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is not only a disappointment for me but a grave economical concern. Due to

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placement, I cancelled my trip to see my family in Australia and paid a month rent in advance to the landlord. Now my

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has left for

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holiday and there is no way I can get my money back. As your school offers summer semester to international students, would you kindly provide me

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opportunity to work in the school café?

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employment would rescue me from

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financial distress, and I am flexible with any hourly rate. Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely, John Smith

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Jan 14, 2021

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I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

188 words

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