Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and the government should encourage businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Conveying the business to the
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has been an issue of argument and should be given the foremost consideration. I am of the belief that the disadvantages surpass the advantages.
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essay will discuss both merits and drawbacks. On one hand, there are two positives to transfer the factories to
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rural areas.
Firstly
, if the firms go to woodlands,
the
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pollution will decrease.
This
means that the people will
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good air, and drink purified water because the corporations will be away from the residential areas.
Secondly
, not
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only
they are ample unemployment individuals, but
also
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a wide disparity between rich and poor. To illustrate, the will not be a giant difference between people; the citizens will work in the firms.
On the other hand
, there are two main negative points for
this
initiative. To start with,
although
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pollution, there will not be skilled workers. To explain, professional and educated employees are found in urban.
For instance
, Cairo University and Ain Shams University are in Cairo and most skilled professions are
gratuated
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graduated
from these Faculties.
In addition
, if they transfer their business, they will be away from the
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and the
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. In conclusion, despite the
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merits, I would like to restate my opinion that the drawbacks outweigh the
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positives
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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