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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work foe different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

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While some
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 opt for working in the same workplace until they retire, others, choose to
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 for different companies. Personally, I believe that it is imperative that
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 change their workplaces in order to have more excitement and enhance their experience. The main benefit of working in the same place is stability as humans can plan their life according to the salary they receive every month.
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, they will not have to wary about a new
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 environment which could be overwhelming,
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 it is extremely suitable for
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 who suffer from anxiety. Making friendships with the
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 you
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 with requires being together for a while so when you
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 with the same
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 every day you will automatically be friends. Changing workplace has a lot of obvious merits, one of them is the excitement of the new
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 as when
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 are hired in a new company
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 they will
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 hard to prove themselves and give their all to earn good money and to become a crucial part of the
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. A recent study showed that
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 the worker who is new will be 20% effective than the one who has already been in the company for a while. Another important reason is gaining more experience because in any working field there is a new task which will boost
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 knowledge and abilities. To conclude,
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, remaining in the same
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 forever is convenient and good for making long-lasting friendships, it is better than
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 change their
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 to improve their resume and become more productive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Advancement
  • Company-specific skills
  • Loyalty
  • Belonging
  • Exposure
  • Diverse work environments
  • Cultures
  • Broad experience
  • Flexibility
  • Adaptability
  • Professional network
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