Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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to work, study and leisure activities. Some
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hold the belief that playing
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to chill out safely and have
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enefit on educational.
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think that playing
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some
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would help you feel better, playing
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could have value detrimental impact.
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, playing
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could make
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happy, especially
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are a fake
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and
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can do what they want in
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fake
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can play with their friend or their brothers and sisters.
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will do some mission to can earn money, buy anything they want or pass the level. Many celebrities are playing
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with their fan and it can attract more fan.
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, some
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games
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are valuable
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educational.
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could keen on studying and it gets more benefits than traditional teaching.
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,
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games
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could help
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know what to do in real
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, there is a host of negative impact from
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games
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. Some
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keen on playing
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games
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because they can not do what they want in real
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.
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, they pay a lot of time and money to play.
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why some teenagers do bad behaviour
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can have money. They can do society's vices like
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, do not obey their parents. When
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games
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, your information can leak by crime but you could not know. In my opinion,
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overnment need to do something to can make
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nternet safely. We should remove
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related
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violence or society's vices. Teenagers should
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get 1 or 2 hours to relax the internet. School and family need to
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rganization of outdoor activities, do not
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spend more times
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playing
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it related their lesson.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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