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One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

#traffic #congestion #tax #vehicles
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People
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 in most of the countries are facing
traffic
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 problems on daily basis
specially
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 during office hours,
goverment
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government
governments
 usually impose multiple plans to control the
traffic
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 out of which one is to increase the taxes on private vehicles. I do not
aggree
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agree
 with
this
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 idea as in developed countries
people
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 are more diverted towards comfort rather
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then
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 paying money in any form.
Firstly
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, better Infrastructure plays the key role to solve any
traffic
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 problem because it will help to
accomodate
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accommodate
 more vehicles on the
roads
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. Alternate
routes
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 can divert and balance the
traffic
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. Underpass, highways will
also
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 help in connecting the multiple alternate
routes
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. If a person is going to his office
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 he can easily track the least
time
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 taking
routes
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 that can
avoide
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avoid
 the
traffic
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.
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, better public
transport
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 will
also
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 help
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people
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 to reach
to
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their destination on
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. If
c
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a
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ountry has good railways and public
transport
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 system
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people
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 can utilize the same to save their
time
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. having
g
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ood frequency of buses, metros or public shuttle can
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accommodate
l
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ot of
crowd
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 which will reduce
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ot of
traffic
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 from the
roads
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. Public
transport
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 is usually cheaper and
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time saving
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 compare to
c
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ost of fuel used in the vehicle and
time
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 consumed in busy
roads
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. In my opinion, increase in taxes does not have any impact on the
traffic
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 problems rather
goverment
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government
 should
focused
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 more on Infrasture development by building more
routes
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, highways or flyover
also
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governmet
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government
 should improve the public
transport
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in country
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in-country
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 by increasing the frequency on
roads
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 or introducing more trains.
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